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Okay, technically time was even - 2 AM; I awoke feeling rested and energized, and with a strong urge to flesh out the outline for chapter 10. I had a general idea prior of some of the events that would take place, but it had been little more that a plot skeleton and a couple of scenes. I now have a full outline and need to transform it into proper PoV narrative.
If I don't split it this may be the longest chapter yet, the outline is 10k. I'm trying something new with this chapter... new to me anyway. It has become necessary for me to exceed my comfort zone and write certain scenes that I usually gloss over - it's not that I don't want to write them, just that I find it difficult. In Dreyanna's story, it is no longer optional - this scene NEEDS to be in the story, and needs to be done well. *gulp*
It is now 5:30 (AM) and I made a quick backup of the outline - just in case the techno-sprites decide to torment me with their evil cyber-pixie frolic.
It is my sincerest intent that chapter 10 be posted this year - and though I had intended to take a break from this series after chapter 9. so that I could work on other series and related short stories, I instead put the hooks ( as appropriate ) in this chapter so that I can tie them together when the other stories are written. Perhaps it can answer a few lingering questions... like what has Zarna been up to since chapter 1? and what is Drake planning? ( that should come to more light in chapter 11 )
I do still want to work on other series, the funny part is every series I want to work on right now needs/could greatly benefit from the aforementioned challenging scene. One of them even leads off with it.
I hope I've been suggestively vague enough that you all know the type of scene to which I refer. With luck it will be the first of many such.
And for the love of Mike (whoever that may be), would somebody leave me a comment on the series?
It's FEEDBACK that fuels writers to continue... and the lingering fear that no one is reading that makes us quit.
I will try to do more of the same. I have many galleries/libraries to catch up on and I will try to make a habit of commenting frequently (and as I have appropriate comments to leave).
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Three chapters have been added within the last month:
chapter voting is also open: shadowrx.deviantart.com/journa…
I would appreciate any feedback, I hope you are enjoying her story.
If I don't split it this may be the longest chapter yet, the outline is 10k. I'm trying something new with this chapter... new to me anyway. It has become necessary for me to exceed my comfort zone and write certain scenes that I usually gloss over - it's not that I don't want to write them, just that I find it difficult. In Dreyanna's story, it is no longer optional - this scene NEEDS to be in the story, and needs to be done well. *gulp*
It is now 5:30 (AM) and I made a quick backup of the outline - just in case the techno-sprites decide to torment me with their evil cyber-pixie frolic.
It is my sincerest intent that chapter 10 be posted this year - and though I had intended to take a break from this series after chapter 9. so that I could work on other series and related short stories, I instead put the hooks ( as appropriate ) in this chapter so that I can tie them together when the other stories are written. Perhaps it can answer a few lingering questions... like what has Zarna been up to since chapter 1? and what is Drake planning? ( that should come to more light in chapter 11 )
I do still want to work on other series, the funny part is every series I want to work on right now needs/could greatly benefit from the aforementioned challenging scene. One of them even leads off with it.
I hope I've been suggestively vague enough that you all know the type of scene to which I refer. With luck it will be the first of many such.
And for the love of Mike (whoever that may be), would somebody leave me a comment on the series?
It's FEEDBACK that fuels writers to continue... and the lingering fear that no one is reading that makes us quit.
I will try to do more of the same. I have many galleries/libraries to catch up on and I will try to make a habit of commenting frequently (and as I have appropriate comments to leave).
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Three chapters have been added within the last month:
Dreyanna - Chapter 07
Dreyanna - Chapter 07
(c) 2012 by Shadowriter
http://Shadowriter.com
https://shadowrx.deviantart.com
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[previously...]
We learned that this announcer doesn't know when to shut up.
We learned that our heroes have alter-egos... literally. And it was this other persona that drew them together...
We learned that Zarna has gifted Andrea with the ability to unlock any doorknob simply by turning...
We learned the author sometimes alternates between the spellings Dre and Drey - which we can only assume has significance in indicating which personality is in control.
We learned that Drake has a lot of toys, and he loves to share his toys with the other kids.
oh and there was some...
[and now...]
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*** Elsewhat, in the Eternal Now ***
"I know that smile... you're sure about this?", Farah asked.
"Come with me."
Farah's hesitation found no words, she knew no argument would change Drey's mind. Had her love decided i
Dreyanna - Chapter 08
Dreyanna - Chapter 08
(c) 2012 by Shadowriter
http://Shadowriter.com
https://shadowrx.deviantart.com
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[previously...]
We learned that there's a place, that's not a place, that is a place where you can't place things, but where everything has a place.
We learned who and what Dreyanna and Farah are, and why they sought each other.
...
and Jen was ...
[and now...]
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Dreyanna wrapped herself around Jen's mortally wounded body; Farah would not be his - Death would have to come through her first. "Please don't go", she whispered as her tears washed blood from Jen's neck. "Don't you leave me!", Dre willed every ounce of her own life into Farah.
. . .
"I have them", Three calls into his comm grinning from the shadows as he spots the two girls; dead or unconscious, it didn't matter to Three - they would not escape this time.
. . .
Andrea awoke with what had to be the worst hangover she had ever experienced, and
Dreyanna - Chapter 09
Dreyanna - Chapter 09
(c) 2012 by Shadowriter
http://Shadowriter.com
https://shadowrx.deviantart.com
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[previously...]
Andrea escaped the arena with Jen's dying body only to be surrounded by slagmen on the roof of her damaged gym. In her weakened state she was unable to fight all of them off before succumbing to the barrage of plasma fire.
[and now...]
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Dreyanna's screams brought Farah back to the surface, and she could feel her body healing as she continued to draw heat energy into herself. Her fractured bones re-fused stronger, her muscles swole, and she could feel a new power coursing through her veins - it was unlike any power she had ever felt, but she knew what it was; Drey had passed Zarna's gift to her, and the Val enzymes were evolving. "Damn you", Farah exclaimed, seeing what Drey's sacrifice had cost her, wishing instead it was her that lie wounded.
Seconds later the demons were out of ammo and Farah
chapter voting is also open: shadowrx.deviantart.com/journa…
I would appreciate any feedback, I hope you are enjoying her story.
FUCK ECLIPSE + this FUCKTARDED JOURANL EDITOR!
has anyone else tried PASTING TEXT into this PIECE OF SHIT?! It FUCKS ALL THE TEXT and replaces it with FUCKING WINKY EMOJIS!!!!!!!!!! WHAT DIPSHIT CODED THIS!?
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I have a bunch of small improvements to the
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For those (few) of you who have not "upgraded" to Windows 10, I have just two words of advice:
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Or, as Admiral Akbar so succinctly put it, "IT'S A TRAP!"
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Fuck Microsoft. Forced Fucking update corrupted LogonUI.exe! Now I can't type into any system dialogs... damned lucky I didn't setup the desktop with a fucking windows/live account this time or I'd be unable to log the fuck in to my own computer!
I thought they only fucked up the calculator app, since it didn't respond to keystrokes... then I discovered feedback hub was the same. Thought, maybe that was still calc.exe's problem... then I noticed that the settings app wasn't accepting keys...
This morning, after trying to wake my computer back up I found I couldn't dismiss the lock screen with the keyboard... I had to click a fucking search-
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This is an honest critique. Let me just say I'm a big fan of your writing but, for the sake of feedback I'll be blunt and say there are a couple of problems in particular with the Dreyanna story.
As far as the story line itself I think at this point it's difficult to follow it and draw any conclusions..the first couple of chapters were fun to read yet mysterious--around chapter 4 it got more and more convoluted with new characters being introduced almost each time and all that goddess stuff going on. Every time you put out a new chapter I feel like I have to go back and catch up on everything so far because you do very little to help us understand what's going on, instead putting in more mystery rather than answers.
I decided a month or so back I'd wait for a couple more chapters to come out before reading through them all in one go--that way I'll understand much better what's going on I feel. Doing one long story next rather than splitting it up like you've done so far is probably better for the flow of this particular story when there are so many things happening at once--and, it might be I'm not the only one who thinks that way.
Again I like Dreyanna's story a lot but, the way you're telling it is hard to follow so I guess you could do a quick recap to help us catch up? That would probably help more readers ease into it as well.
As far as the story line itself I think at this point it's difficult to follow it and draw any conclusions..the first couple of chapters were fun to read yet mysterious--around chapter 4 it got more and more convoluted with new characters being introduced almost each time and all that goddess stuff going on. Every time you put out a new chapter I feel like I have to go back and catch up on everything so far because you do very little to help us understand what's going on, instead putting in more mystery rather than answers.
I decided a month or so back I'd wait for a couple more chapters to come out before reading through them all in one go--that way I'll understand much better what's going on I feel. Doing one long story next rather than splitting it up like you've done so far is probably better for the flow of this particular story when there are so many things happening at once--and, it might be I'm not the only one who thinks that way.
Again I like Dreyanna's story a lot but, the way you're telling it is hard to follow so I guess you could do a quick recap to help us catch up? That would probably help more readers ease into it as well.